She walks away from the house, the heat on her back evoking a retaliatory satisfaction. She may never get the stench of his burning flesh out of her pores, but has no remorse. She is done picking the asphalt out of her soul.
This week’s question is:
The challenge is to tell a story in exactly 42 words. How’d I do?
37 thoughts on “Eye For An Eye – Gargleblaster #156”
The “picking the asphalt” image is very gritty. I’m cringing just thinking of it.
Oh good! …lol I take that as a compliment 🙂
love that last line
Thanks Christina 🙂
“Picking the asphalt out of her soul” is brilliant. You may want to adjust your tenses a bit – you hop from past to present, which is a little confusing! Thanks for linking up!
Oops. I’m on it! Thanks so much.
“stench of his burning flesh out of her pores” that certainly paints a picture, doesn’t it? Wowski! nice!
Thanks 🙂 I think I like this gargleblaster challenge!
So many great lines here. My favorite is, “She is done picking the asphalt out of her soul.”
Thanks so much! I went back and forth on that one…glad I kept it.
so much conveyed here… in that last line especially.
I appreciate you saying so. Never really know if people see what I’m writing.. Especially in these shirt pieces.
shirt pieces? ha!
The first line really grabbed me, and the second line horrified me. Well done!
Thanks. I’ll take that as a compliment 🙂
This was fierce.
Oooh fierce. I could get used to that word. Thanks for checking it out.
I have to go with the others – the last line threw me off my seat
Thanks, really. I’m so glad I went with my gut on that line!
HOW could you go back and forth over the asphalt line?? It’s everything a closing line should be! Also I just did that silly 50 word challenge and I have NO IDEA how you evoked what you did in 42??!!!!! You’re The Queen of Edgy!
Awww … Thank you! I’ll take that title any day 🙂
Yes! That last line. I need that as a tattoo or something! 🙂
I love that idea!
Yiikes, now that is vengeful. Then again, maybe he deserved it 🙂
Oh yes…he deserved it! 🙂
Asphalt in the soul. I agree, a great image.
Well damn…I don’t want to mess with her.
Ha! No…me either. She’s cray cray for sure.
whoo – she is one mad chick. That is a lot of anger packed away. Chilling.
I’m glad that’s the impression she gave. To me, she took more than she ever should have, which is what led her to light ’em up! Thanks for reading 🙂
Blown away by that last line and more power to her!!
Thank you, truly!
Oh, my. Strong stuff here. Well done.
That last line is so powerful.
So nice to hear that. Thank you.